This term in writing we are writing a picture book for the younger students to start we made a writing plan for this. My story is about two detectives they have a hidden base hidden deep underneath the water they get a call from a Rabbit who’s daughter’s toys have been stolen so they detectives set up a trap so when the thief comes they can catch them they wait for a long time then the trap is sprung and it turns out the theif was the Rabbit’s daughter! She wanted to be a detective so she stole the toys to get the detective’s attention to show them she was smart. The two detectives then set up a young spy programm for all they little animals that want to be detectives.
This is my story map:
If you were to make a story what would yours be?
Hi,
I like the sound of the story with all the Magic, lush story line, it paints a picture of what it will look like.
Why are you doing a story like that, what gave you the idea?
keep up the good work.
-Nicholas
Wow Miriam,
I am loving the background that you have put along with the writing it makes me feel like i’m in a galaxy. I love how you have put positive information about your story. I am in love with your detective story I found it very interesting because it means that they are set on a mission and have to find clues. If I was to make a story it would probably be about 2 dogs. Something that I think you could do better next time is to put a little bit more vocabs in it and a little bit more falling action in it but apart from that it’s amazing, keep up the good work.
Hine
Hello Mirriam,
Great job and I would create a story about something adventurous maybe.
I think your story is going to be awesome.
– Serah
Wow Mariam,
I liked the template you picked for this structure template.
It make me feel like I’m on the galaxy. I also liked how you put a lot of information.
Keep up the great work.
-Dylan